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Break This Dance
Contributed by
waos
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Saturday, 15th January 2005 @ 04:59:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Theories of creationism, evolution,
of why the earth feels pain.
There's no solution,
we're seeking answers in vain.
Can you break this dance of death
in which I twist and twirl?
Where did I go,
where's that innocent girl?
In the arms of this illusionist
I see beyond myself.
In spite of these contusions,
maybe it will lose itself.
Can you return it to pristine,
can you heal this shattered mask?
Can you shower warm rain instead of pain
in which the world can bask?
Mindless motions entwining beyond this awareness,
aching bones collapse;
Consuming repititions beyond consciousness,
this mindlessness entraps.
Can you see beyond your mindless mannerisms,
and heal this masochist?
Can you crush the power-mad kingdoms
and eradicate the sadist?
Break this dance of death,
bring back the innocent girl.
Heal this masochist,
let the life unfurl.
Copyright ©
waos
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2005-01-15 16:59:11]
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Re: Break This Dance
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by afterdark on
Saturday, 15th January 2005 @ 05:28:52 PM AEST
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| This is one that I really do like now. |
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Re: Break This Dance
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by apcfan on
Saturday, 15th January 2005 @ 06:28:27 PM AEST
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Awesome poem!
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Re: Break This Dance
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by sean88 on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 10:38:41 AM AEST
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Absolutely brilliant!!
sean xxx |
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Re: Break This Dance
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 18th January 2005 @ 02:12:19 AM AEST
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wow this was friggin rad. The part about
healing the masochist was my favourite. I love
how you write and often when I am reading
your poems I wish I could write like you. I'm
glad you found this poem and thnx for sharing
it with us.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Break This Dance
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 01:33:14 PM AEST
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Wow that was absouletly brilliant writing,
a very creative powerful poem,
dark but deffinately beautiful.
Jane x |
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Re: Break This Dance
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by faith_my_eyes on
Friday, 21st January 2005 @ 07:45:02 PM AEST
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| How dare you hide this from the world for so long!?! Excellent poem! I loved the rhyme scheme, and the language evoked strong images of one with great struggles. |
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Re: Break This Dance
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by Stitch on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 10:03:05 PM AEST
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Now, I like this. I wish I could get this kind of depth and cleverness when I use rhyme. Nice stuff.
Stitch |
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