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:.MaYbe.:
Contributed by
pUnKa_RaCh
on
Thursday, 13th January 2005 @ 08:12:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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If I killed myself
Maybe you would see
I loved you deeply
And you were meant for me
If I was dead
Maybe you would realize
My anguished hurt
And hear my bitter cries
Would you cry for me?
Feel guilty for what you caused?
Open your eyes
Or happily applause?
How would you feel
Looking down at my lifeless body
Thinking back to your words
Those cruel words so clearly
My heart is better off dead
Than beating for you
I want to die now
Because of your love so untrue
Maybe it would make you see
What you did was not ok
How you pained me so
In every possible way
Someone just kill me now
Shoot me in the head
All because of him
I desire to be dead
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pUnKa_RaCh
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2005-01-13 20:12:30]
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Re: :.MaYbe.:
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by Whitelightning77 on
Thursday, 13th January 2005 @ 08:22:28 PM AEST
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anguish spoken. see past the pain and grow to be strong. easier said than practiced.
good flow
thanks for sharing
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Re: :.MaYbe.:
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by Rolzwalt on
Thursday, 13th January 2005 @ 08:26:02 PM AEST
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| Sad.. I'd say. I really like the rhyming. The harsh imagery really hardens your point. I'd change 'Appluase' to Applaud though. It's a good read... and I'm sorry if you went through this. |
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Re: :.MaYbe.:
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 13th January 2005 @ 09:53:46 PM AEST
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This is such a sad write.
It's good though...and I like the flow
Nice work. |
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