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Struglinggling Teenager
Contributed by
jjones12
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Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 11:04:33 PM in AEST
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I don't understand,
It's to hard for me,
I don't understand what you want me to be,
I forgot i need a example.
Oh, thats you,
I used to be smat,
Now i'm not,
I JUST DON'T GET IT,
Why did i have to start,
I was so so very smart,
Now i'm almost dead,
And you've flead
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Re: Struglinggling Teenager
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by kidpoet_213 on
Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 11:36:02 PM AEST
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Well... other than a few errors... I'd say u have an excellent write here. A lot of emotion is released in this write... a lot a pain is there also...
U know... being a teenager once... as we all are at some point in our lives... I can understand where u are coming from with this... a friend has left and u don't understand why this has happened? It's nothing new... it happens everyday in life... just hang in there... hold on... life's not over...
I knowfriends are hard to come... maybe tis wasn't a friend at all... I don't know.
Anyway... u have some spelling errors...
It should be Struggling Teenager in the title. he 2nd line should be too hard... 4th line... shuld be an example... 6th line... be smart (probably a slip of the key there) and the last line should be you've fled.
A great poem though... keep writing... keep getting those feelings out... don't let them bottle up...
~Donna~ |
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Re: Struglinggling Teenager
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by autumngreeneyes on
Thursday, 13th January 2005 @ 02:06:53 AM AEST
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| reminds me I started a new poem.. "Mom can you be strong now".. thanks for the reminder.. all kids need a good example..I feel your hurt..it really comes across |
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Re: Struglinggling Teenager
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by Scarlett on
Thursday, 13th January 2005 @ 04:53:15 AM AEST
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very nice poem, real emotion in the words.
hey kid poet, in your comment shuld has an O in it!!! lol
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