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I spent the day on a drive to nowhere
Contributed by
girltranscended
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Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 11:28:46 PM in AEST
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I spent the day on a drive to nowhere
for I am lost and I can't find
a way to calm this aching soul
and free a piece of mind.
I take them in, and wrap them in
all the warmth that's mine to give
and I give away and don't get back
all the things I need to live.
I am left inside an empty shell
a shell which I've outgrown
I'm right inside to now repent
all things I should have known.
I can't go back and can't move on
for sadness overwhelms
I gave my heart, and gave my time
for an end which I offend.
**On a side note you can sing this poem by dropping (roughly) the first word of each line and at the end of every four lines allow your mind to hear the background music going into the "Spoonman" chorus (: or other music of your choice :)***
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Re: I spent the day on a drive to nowhere
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by Tanmaya on
Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 12:09:07 AM AEST
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I can identify with your words a lot, right now.
Specially liked the second stanza.
Thnaks for sharing this. |
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Re: I spent the day on a drive to nowhere
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 06:30:54 AM AEST
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awwww heartbreaking and sad, yet so insightful!!
Perhaps you are not as lost as you think you are :)
Great write! |
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Re: I spent the day on a drive to nowhere
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 13th January 2005 @ 11:37:31 PM AEST
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Oh... how I can relate--- been there, done that - see Roxbury Falls (ironically, you must have driven right by there, eh?). Don't know why, but I also start, or end, or pass through our hometown on my journeys... ok - I do know why... I'm just rambling I guess...
"I can't go back and can't move on"... just... rips me wide open. I spent YEARS in that place. Here, I'm tempted to insert a ton of big sister-ish commentary - but (lucky you!) I'll refrain from doing so for two reasons 1) Jecks already said what I'd have to say and 2) you, of course, will find your own way... sometimes, it just takes time. Back or forward... I'm here if you need me. *hug*
One technical note... you go find-mind, give-live, outgrown-known and then overwhelm... um... offend? Offend threw me....
And... "Spoonman"??????? You'll have to enlighten me...
Feeling both in and out of touch *wink*,
SNM
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Re: I spent the day on a drive to nowhere
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by girltranscended on
Saturday, 15th January 2005 @ 09:41:34 PM AEST
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*contemplating comments
just thinking here about SNM's offend remark and I guess I'll just say so what in the nicest way possible - cause in all reality I know it's not quite right but I'll tell you it fits none-the-less. It fits so well that I knew it wasn't coming back out even if it did throw the whole thing.
Thanks tho for all the poets who comment, who share and who give of themselves, it's kinda why we are all here right? |
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Re: I spent the day on a drive to nowhere
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 02:55:13 AM AEST
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this is excellent! hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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