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Gather the Storm
Contributed by
TaintedSoul
on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 03:38:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Disjointed realities left
for confusion’s wake,
lingering dismantled psyche
dangling from life’s weakest thread.
Prelude to death is the tumult
of winds which pummel,
relentless and unforgiving as
time passes silently through
the fog.
Drag the blade through wave’s wake
and cut the foam of life only
for futility’s sake! For each crash
signifies the onslaught of those
seconds ticking after the hour
hand circles endlessly.
Let the salt mix with blood as
sightless wounds coagulate with
maggots. Death is an endless course
in which we dance eternally.
Pestilence and decay weep for
the destruction of morbid beauty
while the sun sets fire upon the
flesh of dying creatures left
within their own unrest at dawn.
I shall drink their tears like wine
and gather the storm that swirls
within my decaying soul.
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TaintedSoul
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2005-01-11 15:38:28]
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Re: Gather the Storm
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 11:20:42 PM AEST
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| wow very powerful write. |
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Re: Gather the Storm
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by Baronhawk on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 01:36:24 AM AEST
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| In truth I like the style of which this poem is written, the use of words and the slight delicate lilt of the lines. It does speak of a finely tuned effort at contriving the rhythm of the poem. The darkly subject also speaks to me, of a darksome soul which sits at the edge of human decadent and drinking in the excesses of the human condition, to "gather the storm" so to speak. How ever if there is one comment on the negative side is there seem to be a lack of focus in the poem. A certain unspoken ambiguity. I fail to identify either the point or the actual message. But this is just my opinion, it could be just your intention to do so as part of the presentation. But a very well done write in my opinion. |
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