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Remnants Of My Soul
Contributed by
Fwog
on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 02:54:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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As I gazed into the mirror
the reflection stark and cold
revealed the worn and weary shell
of the remnants of my soul.
This soul so filled with promise
from the moment I was born
now gazed at me in anguish
scarred, tattered and torn.
It took me back in reverie
down the byways I had strode
down the many dark alleys of life
walked by the foolish and the bold.
The bold through their endeavours
stride on to victory
but I one of the foolish
found heartache and misery.
This reject of a mother's hand
filled with negativity
screamed at the world in anger
you world, you owe me.
I took on law and order
railed against authority
never thinking the establishment
could lay its hand on me.
but time and tide at last ran out
for time it is not blind
and it does not gladly suffer fools
but reacts with chains that bind.
I made a pledge that evening
not to live for my self gain
but to cherish self and others
make my soul whole again.
(c) copyright 2005
Fwog
down the byways I had strode
Copyright ©
Fwog
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Re: Remnants Of My Soul
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 02:59:30 PM AEST
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very good write, you have expressed yourself so well here,
pixie xx |
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Re: Remnants Of My Soul
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 03:00:04 PM AEST
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| Since I'm in a humble mood anyway, your poem catches that mode of being perfectly. Blessings. |
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Re: Remnants Of My Soul
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by TaintedSoul on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 03:10:42 PM AEST
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If life were easy, would there be strong people in the world? Me thinks not, for all who live would have handed everything to them on a silver platter; leaving them helpless.
However, on the other hand, life should not be strewn with broken dreams and turmoil around every bend.
Expressive write.
peace
TS |
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Re: Remnants Of My Soul
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 04:10:15 PM AEST
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| Great write! Especially the first stanza, so profound of a statement. Thankyou for sharing. Much peace. |
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Re: Remnants Of My Soul
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 05:08:30 PM AEST
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My Dearest Dallas... Life once dealt you some cards that you, perhaps played badly. But you have also been some another set of cards with which you can redeem yourself.
I know this is what you have done and will continue doing.
Great write..Thank you for sharing this, my friend.
Hugs from your island friend...
Jenni
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Re: Remnants Of My Soul
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by Glo on
Tuesday, 25th January 2005 @ 04:29:15 PM AEST
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Loved your write, a true look at the lives of many. Very good post.
Glo! |
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Re: Remnants Of My Soul
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 04:52:46 PM AEST
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beautifully written as always, dallas, with a very positive message:) big hugs n' lotsa love nessa
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Re: Remnants Of My Soul
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 22nd July 2005 @ 03:37:34 PM AEST
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I like the message here and the flow of the rythym ... I did struggle a few times with cadence on a few of the lines but when I read them again slower it worked ok. A very pleasant read. Thanks.
DSapelo |
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