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Macabre Hearts
Contributed by
suicideparty
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Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 10:19:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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We fell so far just to begin -
We’re too corrupt to start again
Too far behind to ever win
Too frightened now to look within
We pray to what we’ll never see
Consumed with what our life won’t be
We long for Hell to set us free -
Our soul - the door, your God - the key
Despising those we’re meant to trust
Forsaking love, we thrive on lust
Uttered lines for death unjust -
Ashes to ashes - dust to dust
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suicideparty
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2005-01-10 22:19:47]
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Re: Macabre Hearts
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 10:58:32 PM AEST
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| Not bad. The rhyme is good as far as I can see. Good write! Cheers! |
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Re: Macabre Hearts
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by MorbidDeath on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 12:19:52 AM AEST
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This is an awesome poem i loved your expressiveness and how descriptive u were. The comparisons were awesoem too deffinately would be one i'd read again
Caitlyn |
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Re: Macabre Hearts
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 04:54:16 AM AEST
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An interesting piece, here.
Sombre in tone...
Intriguing concepts, in regards to what some may call "tainted love"...
Reminds me of the band "H.I.M"
Might I add, a beautiful conclusion.
An excellent write!
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