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Keeping a Night Sky Alive
Contributed by
justjonesy
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Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 07:38:52 PM in AEST
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LovePoetry
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Shooting stars keep a night sky alive
and calm dark waters are rippled by a feeding fish
With our back against the dewy grass, you whisper,
"they dont last.....so make a wish."
They burn so bright, then drop out of sight
I would spend a lifetime to take it all in
Maybe our fires done burning
and like those stars.....weve fallen
Our past sings through swaying trees
and words break silence like a distant wind chime
Maybe this is only the beginning
and we will burn brighter in time
So tonight I share my wish
to the girl with the broken smile
ill throw it all in the water
and ask her to stay a while
Copyright ©
justjonesy
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2005-01-10 19:38:52]
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Re: Keeping a Night Sky Alive
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 07:45:09 PM AEST
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| i like this and the ending is really sweet and clever. good write!! |
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Re: Keeping a Night Sky Alive
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 07:48:20 PM AEST
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I really liked this one. It's very sweet and the flow is great.
Awesome write! |
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Re: Keeping a Night Sky Alive
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by zenmind on
Thursday, 14th April 2005 @ 04:44:11 PM AEST
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I've read a few of your poems, and I can tell that you put your heart into your writing. You also have insight in your reflections which gives your poetry more of a mature feeling than most of the stuff on this web site.
So tonight I share my wish
to the girl with the broken smile
ill throw it all in the water
and ask her to stay a while
I liked the way you said this. There is depth in its feeling.
Be True,
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