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Unknown
Contributed by
Foo
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Wednesday, 4th December 2002 @ 10:30:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Clenched fists
sweaty palms
trembling hands
weak arms
eyes once blue
now bloodshot red
life flashbacks
devil in my head
clouds of confusion
shortness of breath
turned away from life
now facing death
my heart a mess
a mess of emotion
wrong interpretation
of love and devotion
a once meaningful word
now not a meaning at all
nothing will travel
through the thickness of these walls
no amount of nothing
no screams or cries
will ever be heard
through these walls of life.
Copyright ©
Foo
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2002-12-04 10:30:00]
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Re: Unknown
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by springchic1979 on
Wednesday, 4th December 2002 @ 11:00:38 AM AEST
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I believe this is the first poem I have read by you, and I have to say I enjoyed it. It flowed well and had nice rhymes. My favorite lines were:
my heart a mess
a mess of emotion
wrong interpretation
of love and devotion
Nice wording! :)
Yvonne |
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Re: Unknown
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by wyrd_faerie on
Wednesday, 4th December 2002 @ 04:12:17 PM AEST
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| this is amazing, it really is, i love it, i absolutely love it, i have written a poem that's so much like this...this is like my thoughts written by someone else...very good... |
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Re: Unknown
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 4th December 2002 @ 04:19:45 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC, Foo.. This has a lot of great emotions weaved into it... Great imagery. Looking forward to reading more..
Jenni |
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Re: Unknown
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by nightrider on
Wednesday, 4th December 2002 @ 04:24:34 PM AEST
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| wow... this is great... its so full of emotions that are all to familiar to me right now.... |
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Re: Unknown
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by OreO on
Wednesday, 4th December 2002 @ 11:29:55 PM AEST
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Wrong interpretation of love and devotion.....i can honestly say i was given the wrong interpretation of love and devotion....but because of that i am now more cautious and shall not let it happen again ...your poetry is very dark and heart shattering to read....which is what makes it so beautiful, with the flow of wording you use in your poetry it takes one's breath away....thanks for sharing this one..i look forward to reading more of your poetry....and welcome to YPDC....
.:*~*:.OreO.:*~*:. |
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Re: Unknown
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by frozensuicide on
Thursday, 5th December 2002 @ 12:35:36 AM AEST
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ww i like this one its nice, intensified with emotions of death and a passion. i like it! your good has that beat that makes you just wanna keep reading it ver and over again.
hug a moose! |
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Re: Unknown
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by Roshie on
Thursday, 5th December 2002 @ 09:48:14 AM AEST
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very well written old man *hides* :P
don't be lazy keep em comming ;)
*hugz* |
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Re: Unknown
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by XXXsilvervoodooXXX on
Monday, 24th March 2003 @ 01:36:41 PM AEST
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| very good work |
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