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The Weakening Light Of The Outside
Contributed by
declinefoale
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Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 02:17:10 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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The peircing light of the outside
fails to burst this darkend bubble
within, shadows overwellms all that is bright
creeping over every inch of the innocent light
A bed lies dorment in the centre of this world
sheets unmade, unwashed, unloved
a bed fit for only one womans lust
a woman who no longer believes in a mans trust
The walls are faded red, so pale
scratched and beaten showing years of wear
I can feel the walls closing in so tight
I can see the window there is no light
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declinefoale
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2005-01-10 02:17:10]
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Re: The Weakening Light Of The Outside
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by TaintedSoul on
Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 06:59:21 AM AEST
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The sadness drips from this like tears. Well bled.
peace
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Re: The Weakening Light Of The Outside
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 11:18:11 AM AEST
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hauntingly beautiful... hugs n' love nessa
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Re: The Weakening Light Of The Outside
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by mina-1 on
Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 03:49:32 PM AEST
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well written
you can feel the pain and sadness in your poem. well done
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Re: The Weakening Light Of The Outside
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 20th April 2005 @ 03:45:02 AM AEST
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Wow...
I can truly relate.
I have written pieces much similar to this...
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Re: The Weakening Light Of The Outside
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by Channing on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 09:31:17 AM AEST
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Very melancholy, I like it a alot. Good job!
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