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Weak
Contributed by
CodyJ
on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 10:01:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Life is not enough to live,
it's not the only thing I'd give
to rest my head upon the ground,
to lay at peace, I haven't found
a place to place my weary head,
in the clutch of a flowery bed.
These shackles are too heavy I find
my greatest detriment is my mind
I don't want no more of this grief
I want some aspirin and some relief.
Please hold my high as long as you can
make me see, make me understand
why it is I'm not like you,
or that I'm more so than you want me to.
On my knees and in my air
the vapors swallow and wretch my care
from my hand and kill their breath,
a long silence and a black death.
I'll give anything no matter the cost
to break me free, and be unlost.
Copyright ©
CodyJ
... [
2005-01-09 22:01:21]
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Re: Weak
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 10:12:49 PM AEST
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| ::so stunned by brilliance:: this reminds me of kurt cobain, and i do not like how it reminded me of him. |
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Re: Weak
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 10:48:39 PM AEST
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| Awww... I hope you find a way to feel better. If you can write something this good, I see a lot of potential here. Cheers! |
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Re: Weak
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 12:29:46 AM AEST
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| this was a very sad poem but very extraordinary. i love your use of words and ur rhyme, it sounds great and is very dark. i think we have all wanted to die......so i can relate. well done, i love the start, that sounds the best |
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