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Whether or Not
Contributed by
Red_October
on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 06:14:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Something so complicated
Changed the way I see
Now life evolves
purely out of necessity
Not estranged but
somewhat blinded
Love exploding
is now inside binded
And all the words
become the same
Voices into throat
keep fading
I can't say freedom
when I'm internal chained
Kept away
from what I want most
and felt good
even if I choked
I have to go
I can't stay
pretending to be sane
when the same pain
visits me everyday
whether I see your face
or not
Copyright ©
Red_October
... [
2005-01-09 18:14:53]
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Re: Whether or Not
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by afterdark on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 06:31:23 PM AEST
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I really liked this one here..
and felt good
even if I choked
I have to go
I can't stay
I love that line...gOOD job. |
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Re: Whether or Not
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by Stitch on
Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 09:15:50 AM AEST
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I clenched my teeth on this one. I can feel this pain. This has a grittiy edge to it that isn't apparent on the surface. Nice work as always.
Stitch |
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