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Losers
Contributed by
sniffy
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Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 03:13:31 PM in AEST
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cuts and bruises
wine and marijuana
guns and knives
does this make sense
nah.
it's bout as stupid as the people who use it
GET A LIFE!
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sniffy
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2005-01-09 15:13:31]
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Re: Losers
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by afterdark on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 03:22:04 PM AEST
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| No this is definitly the worse poem I have ever read.. |
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Re: Losers
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 04:44:45 PM AEST
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| Uh huh,I love my wine, call me a loser baby! |
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Re: Losers
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by jjones12 on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 04:45:23 PM AEST
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| it really different but good don't listen to "afterdark" she doesn't understand why you shouldn't kill yourself. she can be a B**** |
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Re: Losers
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by subchild on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 04:52:46 PM AEST
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| in reply to jjjones hun..are you really not all there? aFTERDARK is far far from a she..You know perhaps in other parts of the world where you are..Men are not what should be..But here afterdark is definitly a Man..i THINK AFTER tasting him I should know. |
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Re: Losers
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by Mr_Jeremy on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 05:10:27 PM AEST
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Some malificient individuals would use my cuts and bruises to afford themselves benefits in their petty, fruitless existences.
I use the scars from my cuts, and the colors of my bruises to remind of their plight. Thank you for bringing this best poem of yours to my attention. |
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Re: Losers
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 05:14:50 PM AEST
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Well it's too short and not really a poem. Besides wine is good for your heart if taken in moderation. I realize you were trying to make a point, but it might have been better if you'd taken these issues one at a time and really made a POEM out of it. There are books on how to do that. Cheers!
(PS. Sorry about the people who aren't really giving good advice on how to improve.) |
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Re: Losers
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by AllSmiles on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 05:17:51 PM AEST
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| I see what you're trying to say. But could have been done in a better way. |
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Re: Losers
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by devine_xox on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 06:10:42 PM AEST
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I guess sniffy is trying to make a point. Poetry doesn’t always have to be fantastic and every one has there opinion. I don’t really like this poem but people have to respect ones expression. If you like a poem or not that’s your opinion. I think there are some people in here who take constructive criticism to the next level. Look back at your first poem I bet you wouldn’t want to share it with us.
Note Sniffy: If that’s the way you want to express your self GO 4 IT!!!!
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Re: Losers
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by Sweetheart on
Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 08:30:27 PM AEST
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I think this poem is very truthful. I like that it gets straight to the point. All those losers do need to get a life...or better said..need to get God. Very unique.
Sweetheart |
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