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Waterfall
Contributed by
pixie
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Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 12:14:40 PM in AEST
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As I stand under the waterfall,
I look to the sky & feel insignificant & small,
I shiver as the cold water covers my skin,
Causing me to shake from my head to deep within.
I feel the cold air wrap all around me,
I stand here not knowing if I want to be,
Thoughts of confusion dance in my eyes,
How I long to find a place that’s so dry
My wet body feeling the force of the cold,
I am too weak to even pretend to be bold,
I just let myself be consumed,
As with reality I am not finely tuned.
I know not what to feel or think,
I feel too tired to even eat or to drink,
I will stand here for a thousand years,
Cry many more than a million tears.
Here I stay with the waterfall above,
It seems with myself I have fallen out of love,
I feel numb as the water trickles all around,
I stay silent even as I fall to the ground.
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2005-01-09 12:14:40]
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Re: Waterfall
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by afterdark on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 12:32:51 PM AEST
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| Another very good write pixie |
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Re: Waterfall
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by autumngreeneyes on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 12:37:48 PM AEST
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pixie..I love waterfalls and would love to be under one. I think you meant to put the word to in here though..
s I stand under the waterfall,
I look to the sky & feel insignificant & small,
I shiver as the cold water covers my skin,
Causing me *** shake from my head to deep within.
where I put the big space and stars?
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Re: Waterfall
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by EverlastingDawn on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 12:46:50 PM AEST
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| Great poem. It portrays emotions nicely. the poem kind of keeps you guessing till the very end. Great write |
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Re: Waterfall
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by BlindSuicide on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 01:33:05 PM AEST
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God i don't know if i will ever get tired of reading your work. I want to write like this someday. I've been writing for years and some of my poems still don't seem to satisfy me. Ah oh well. Great write yet again.
~Alucia~ |
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Re: Waterfall
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by reprobate on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 05:18:42 PM AEST
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like crying in the shower, no one knows unless you force yourself to open up
almost an overwhelming feeling
nice write
thanks for sharing |
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Re: Waterfall
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 09:25:16 PM AEST
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so sad... beautifully expressed... hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:-
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Re: Waterfall
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by venkat on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 11:22:30 PM AEST
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| Under the waterfall with million tears..aaah very sad yet beautifully written..hmm hugs my dear soaking beauty..:-) venkat |
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Re: Waterfall
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 03:44:39 PM AEST
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Awww pixie..this is awesome!! Great write....
Hugs
Jenni |
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