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Trapped Inside
Contributed by
brok3nxstar
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Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 10:36:50 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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She's Stuck
Trapped deep inside
She's out of luck
So much to hide
She shouts and screams
But no one hears
She's stuck in all her haunting fears
She kills with words
She dies with stress
She cuts herself to numb the mess
Her skin it bleeds and leaves a mark
She's left with tears and shadows
In the dark
Copyright ©
brok3nxstar
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2005-01-09 10:36:50] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Trapped Inside
(User Rating: 1 ) by afterdark on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 11:04:59 AM AEST (User
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My brain is telling me why why did you allow us to read this?
The way you tried to rhyme here was almost to the point of very silly..You could have done so much more here but it just never did happen. |
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Re: Trapped Inside
(User Rating: 1 ) by brok3nxstar on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 11:29:47 AM AEST (User
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thank you for the critic... ::no sarcasm:: |
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Re: Trapped Inside
(User Rating: 1 ) by brok3nxstar on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 11:31:56 AM AEST (User
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thank you for the critic... ::no sarcasm:: |
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Re: Trapped Inside
(User Rating: 1 ) by devine_xox on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 02:27:43 PM AEST (User
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I pray and Hope you never have tried to cut your self. I understand that in time of hurt and pain words come out that may not intend to but to me any form of writting is an original art in its own right. |
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