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Submerged
Contributed by
Apolla
on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 08:37:31 PM in AEST
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Despretly I gasp for breath,
I see the bubbles rising,
Is this what I want?
Do I want to end it here? Like this?
Thoughts run through my mind endlessly,
I think of many things.
My friends, family, and lovers,
The day to day life I live.
I'm getting weaker now,
Almost no longer breathing.
Then in that moment,
I think of what I'm yet to experience,
Marriage, birth......
So many things that I'm not promised yet everyone takes forgranted.
I forget my sorrows, my wonders, my worries,
The water overtakes me with my final breath........
Copyright ©
Apolla
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2005-01-08 20:37:31]
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Re: Submerged
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by afterdark on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 08:38:43 PM AEST
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| I think if you do try it..Go for pills or something a bit better..Drowning is such a damn downer hun. |
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Re: Submerged
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by breny on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 08:41:40 PM AEST
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| i think you realized a little to late that commiting suicide is stupid without experiencing everything life has to give. good poem though |
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Re: Submerged
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by Artemis03 on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 08:45:28 PM AEST
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Very creative..very cool. Something new that expresses the"you". I like it...
It kinda gets a girl thinkin'.lol. It's all true..
I quiver with fear...jk Artemis2Apolla ^_^ |
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Re: Submerged
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by ViktorMorgan on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 09:19:34 PM AEST
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| Very expressive, tantalizing ending. Expresses alot of emotion |
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Re: Submerged
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by THUGGIN4REAL on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 03:25:43 PM AEST
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| i like your poem , and it doesnt matter if people can relate or not , what matters is that your words come from your heart. nicely done |
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Re: Submerged
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by Whisper on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 11:03:26 PM AEST
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Ahh nice vision words. Excellent choice of words. The reader can almost swallow the bubbles slipping across their lips. Nice write.
Whisper |
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