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vase
Contributed by
dolly_dagger
on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 06:15:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
FriendshipPoetry
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Oh, my little empty vessel
My little painted vase
Flowers died
And now you look so alone
Innocent and vulnerable
Up there on the shelf
Endeavouring to keep your balance
Delicate features
Sad and vacant
White and pure
But insecure
Your arms clamped firmly
Around your chest
Cracks in your face
All the mistakes you made
All the hurt you know you caused
And your liquid regret is memorable
For all the wrong reasons
All of our reasons
We recognise
In you
How can we not sympathise?
A poet on either side
Sandwiched in a hug
Know you are still loved
Copyright ©
dolly_dagger
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2005-01-08 18:15:37]
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Re: vase
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by afterdark on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 07:52:20 PM AEST
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| Decent little write |
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Re: vase
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 08:09:45 AM AEST
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| awww its nice when ppl look after ppl (sounds stupid but...it is...) its a good metaphore or whatever, good use of imagery. and, did u mean to make the poem vaugly vase shaped? if u did, the idea of shaped poetry is somethin ive been wanting to try but ive been too lazy... |
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Re: vase
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by fixed on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 12:38:51 PM AEST
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| I love it, like I love you, like I love Ella. Hey look..not so broken now...! much love, fixed xxx |
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