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Drawn
Contributed by
BlindSuicide
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Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 10:43:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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You speak of nothing but words of love to me
There's not a doubt in my mind it's not meant to be
Even though i love you so
The true feelings on the inside never show
It makes me happy all the love you've shown
But your not here with me i'm all alone
It amazes me how strangely this love has grown
But your there and i'm stuck here to fend for my own
I often cry needing you here so badly
I'd give up everything for you gladly
I'd never again claim to be insane
And i'd never even once complain
To love you so much brings so much pain
I can't help but feel i'm loving in vein
I've never felt so happy and both sad at the same time
But loving you feels like a crime
Or at least it should be because your not mine
We are soul mates we are one combined
You saw past my layers of pain and went straight to the core
For that i will love you forever and more
Even though i'm alone
And though i have to fend for my own
You will always be here with me
But my emotions don't comprehend so easily
Though your not here and there's nothing i can do
I will forever be drawn to you
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Re: Drawn
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by pixie on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 10:44:57 AM AEST
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so emotional and written well,*hugs* powerful writing
pixie xx |
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Re: Drawn
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by afterdark on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 12:53:41 PM AEST
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| Alright...Hmmm.Ok this one is not half bad..Good job. |
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Re: Drawn
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by weepingprophet on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 03:26:43 PM AEST
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my eyes can't help but to descern from belief and strayed opinion. why is it that everytime i visit a write there are comments posted that mirror eachother. Everyone wants to stand in line and compliment every peice of work when some do not deserve to be labeled with titles such as powerful and descriptive. Every work is its own, there can be no second to the first but there is such thing as descretion and i would strongly advise ppl commenting to use some. This work was not bad, it was a portrayal of your personal feelings, a masterpeice of your own design, powerful in its meaning to you but i was still sitting still functioning during the read. Where is captivation where is what is underneath the words, i read the word emotion but felt that the dominating incentive for this write was based on some simple feeling. It was a simple write, it showed no layers of complexity, what is your drive, you claim love, what kind? where is your passion? i know you have it, let it out. Unleash your power in whatever form it comes in.
keep writing, don't ever surrender. life is like paper and feelings are the mess that complicate the words. stay objective and learn that slavery is beautiful in the right form.
~I am merely a complication to you, compelled to breathe for your sanity. after you strip me down to a fraction of what you are i am nothing more than someone. envy gets me nowhere~weepingprophet |
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