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Contributed by
Lostinside
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Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 01:44:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Never
Wanna lose myself
Right?
I as myself
This question
Everyday
My heart
Closing
Closed for you
Only my poems
Hold my feeling
My diary
Lost
Hidden
No one
Can read it
Not even me
Good memories
Don't exist
Still I am
Going on
Till I die
Till my life
Gets better
Copyright ©
Lostinside
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2005-01-05 13:44:05]
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by gherkin on
Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 02:05:45 PM AEST
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This was pretty average. But you have potential.
The theme was also fairly generic:teen angsty.
will be chekin out ur next one
good luck
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 6th January 2005 @ 02:35:00 PM AEST
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You are certainly creative in your format and style. Interestingly, the format of your poem is shaped somewhat like a female person. It is interesting that you talk of not openly sharing with people, which is something you confront others for in your other recent poem.
I especially like the last few words...."Still I am Going on till I die....Till my life ...Gets better
Very interesting write
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