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INSIDE THE WRINKLES OF TIME
Contributed by
imalive_enoughsaid
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Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 04:46:14 PM in AEST
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LoveRemembered
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Come play with me , inside the wrinkles of time
lets cross the lines that divides us and unwind
unfold the layers of memories inside my mind
remember all the good things, and leave the bad ones behind
so for just one moment , we can be like we used to
we can forget the angry reds, and live in a shade of blue
old father time , cans see that i really need this
i"ll forget my heart was broken , and just pick up the shattered peices
i can barley fathem , how much i loved that place in time
thats the one place id go to , if i could backtrack and rewind
but until you decide to play , & wipe off the clocks old rust
like a curling picture inside a fire ,i'll watch this image burn to dust
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Re: INSIDE THE WRINKLES OF TIME
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by BlindSuicide on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 05:10:37 PM AEST
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This was a good poem. Showed great emotion. However personally i think the ending should have been stronger, but thats just me. Other than that it is a great poem.
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Re: INSIDE THE WRINKLES OF TIME
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 05:22:48 PM AEST
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It's good to see someone admit they love
a poem they wrote,
and want to share that with the rest of us.
You bet your a$$ I will read it
when you think you have something to
be proud of.
I love the words in this poem.
A fantastic expression!
You did a good job on this,
I liked it.
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Re: INSIDE THE WRINKLES OF TIME
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 06:20:26 PM AEST
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could do with a bit of editing...
"barley fathem" should be "barely phathom"
otherwise it's an awesome poem... I loved it
Thanks for sharing and like Ghost Moth said, it's nice to see someone admitting that they love their poetry. Good stuff |
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Re: INSIDE THE WRINKLES OF TIME
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 02:10:09 AM AEST
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your right this is wonderful I loved the play on words and the flow forget the resd live in shades of blue love it its refreshing to see someone think back to the good memories stead of hasing out all of the bad
Michelle |
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