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Venomous
Contributed by
CrimsonTears
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Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 10:44:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Kiss my deadly lips
My venom is so very sweet
I can be quite poisonous
I will knock you off your feet
A cold chill runs down your spine
As your body begins to shake
You think that it is nothing
But it’s your life that I will take
You’re fading in and out
Sweat’s pouring down your face
There’s nothing you can do now
My venom is now set in place
Your spitting out warm crimson
It taste like something you’ve had before
Its sweet just like my deadly poison
Its got you wanting more
You scream out my name
And until I come u keep on trying
You’re longing for my venomous kiss
Because you know that you are dying
One last kiss I will grant you
On your lips that are so cold
But it was on MY lips that you died
And that is a memory I shall hold
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CrimsonTears
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2005-01-03 22:44:38]
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Re: Venomous
(User Rating: 1 )
by meganloberg on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 11:41:55 PM AEST
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I like it. A lot.
I'd take a few words out, like
My venom is now set in place
-->My venom is now in place
I guess thats just the way I'd like it, maybe flows better to me
But hey...it's yours, and thats awesome |
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Re: Venomous
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by blacksabbath026 on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 12:36:08 AM AEST
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| very well done, very good talent |
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Re: Venomous
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by subnet_spider on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 02:20:54 AM AEST
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| Excellent write, very expressive. |
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Re: Venomous
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by Kitty_cat on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 08:10:24 AM AEST
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| I really liked this. Class poetry. |
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