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You Promised
Contributed by
pixie
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Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 01:15:07 PM in AEST
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You promised me & my heart you wouldn’t,
You promised my soul that you couldn’t,
But you did, you did & it hurt like hell,
So I went & crawled back in my empty shell.
My heart sank right down into my shoes,
Once again I had been found by the blues,
You told me you would never leave my side,
But you did & it felt like I had died.
You say now you don’t want to lose me ever,
That now you will leave me again never,
But one part of me is saying don’t believe,
That he will lie to you & once again leave.
You hold my hand & look into my eyes,
Telling me that you never utter goodbyes,
I don’t want to get hurt by the man I adore,
I fear that you will leave me on the floor.
We have both been through so much,
Happiness always just within both our clutch,
Just when we smile & begin to relax,
Hurt & pain comes along wielding its axe.
Copyright ©
pixie
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2005-01-03 13:15:07]
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Re: You Promised
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by PhantomVampyress on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 01:25:24 PM AEST
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aww pixie this is a beautiful and sad write.. great job.. things will get better for you there is always a rainbow after the rain
Peace and hope
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Re: You Promised
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 01:35:06 PM AEST
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Kriss what can i say, i can feel this poem a lot. Its like you wrote this for me. Thanks for sharing this poem.
Hugs,
Jane x |
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Re: You Promised
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 03:11:39 PM AEST
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| excellent write. i am always amazed at how your rhymes never seem forced. its nice to see that there is another person that doesnt think promises were made to be broken. |
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Re: You Promised
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 05:07:52 PM AEST
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If a promise is made and so horribly broken, should the heart trust the promiser again? It seems a horrible way to inflict pain on oneself... I'm sorry for the pain.
Please, continue to write-you seem to just pour it out onscreen, and it's so beautiful. |
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Re: You Promised
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by autumngreeneyes on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 05:11:04 PM AEST
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| It's awful waiting for the hurt to come.. sigh..nice write Pixilator.. |
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Re: You Promised
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by little_genna on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 05:45:12 PM AEST
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Pix hun *hugs you so tightly*
This just made my heart hurt for you.
*hugs you again*
you always amaze me...... |
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Re: You Promised
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 01:09:37 AM AEST
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Good poem I love how all your poems tug at
the readers hearts and how you write so
openly. To be honest I didn't think this was
your best and some of the rhymes seemed
rather forced like:
"My heart sank right down into my shoes,
Once again I had been found by the blues,"
Still better than I can do and an awesome
poem despite that. I hope your doing well.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: You Promised
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 07:40:44 PM AEST
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awww... so beautifully sad...... hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: You Promised
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 03:01:01 PM AEST
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I like this one Pixie ... Nothing is ever quite set in stone ... doors are always left open ... and all we can do is hope ... and try, or lock our hearts away and become bitter.
Nazzy ~ |
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