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Life Unsatisfying
Contributed by
renstar
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Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 06:24:29 PM in AEST
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Living in a world thats gone crazy
nothing operating the way it should be
people insane hinding behind false identity
political criminal
smothering goodness intentional
illegal army
destructive tsunami
a world spiraling out of control
lifes values under patrol
wheres all this leading
will there ever be an end to all the bleeding
im losing grip
i feel my mind slip
crying, dieing
forever living a life unsatisfying
Copyright ©
renstar
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2005-01-02 18:24:29]
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Re: Life Unsatisfying
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by x-fetuseater4life-x on
Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 06:26:16 PM AEST
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| yea, that tsunami was sad....good poem. peace! |
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Re: Life Unsatisfying
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by blacksabbath026 on
Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 07:15:34 PM AEST
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| nice ryhme scheme |
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Re: Life Unsatisfying
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by poetmarie on
Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 07:32:22 PM AEST
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| I like the ryhme schem here, it gives edge to the constant tragedy, social destruction, etc., that you speak of here. Well written. |
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Re: Life Unsatisfying
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 07:33:11 PM AEST
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| You sound angry and sad at the same time. A too real emotion. Nice job capturing it. |
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Re: Life Unsatisfying
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 07:42:45 PM AEST
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| i like the tone of this. and how this has a random, but related verses. very nice rhymes to present the concept with also. |
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