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Blood Spilled On The Floor
Contributed by
screwup
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Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 03:45:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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darkness chokes my emotions
your breath numbs my soul
every breath like a fantasy
only awake in dreams
under a stary sky
shall love take part
your breath takes me away
my slashed wrists are bleeding
my flesh is torn
and my love is pure
blood spilled allover my body
and my emotion spilled on the floor
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screwup
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2005-01-02 15:45:34]
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Re: Blood Spilled On The Floor
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by waos on
Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 03:59:41 PM AEST
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not bad, i thought you did a good job.
the last line was definitely my favorite:
"my emotion spilled on the floor"
and i liked "every breath like a fantasy..."
good job,
waos |
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Re: Blood Spilled On The Floor
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by poetmarie on
Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 04:01:20 PM AEST
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| Very dark and powerful. I like that last line - and my emotion spilled on the floor - just like blood. Well done. |
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Re: Blood Spilled On The Floor
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by Sapphire_Blue on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 07:26:39 AM AEST
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| sad poem ,yet showing strength, for you are still fighting the need and the urge, cool poem dee, keep on batling |
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