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If i told you.. (would you listen?)
Contributed by
Bohemian_with_a_pen
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Saturday, 1st January 2005 @ 06:55:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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If i told you i loved you, would you listen? Or would you just pass it off as a crush, a silly infatuation, chuckle and say Ditto Babe.
Would it matter that I sit night after night carving your name into my thighs?
And if i said No, i REALLY love you, would you back off slightly, realizing this is no crush? Give an uneasy crooked smile and pretend you knew what i meant the first time?
(Who are you trying to fool?)
When you hurriedly pull the sheets up trying to cover you and her together, will you look away and murmur, its not what it looks like?
(Could've fooled me)
Just know this, as i slice away at my soul with this rusty knife:
i'm DYING for you baby...
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Re: If i told you.. (would you listen?)
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by killingmehslowly on
Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 12:38:04 AM AEST
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*unsure what to say* i like it..i can say that much. Its different from what i'm used to reading..and theres no rhyme scheme *realizes there doesn't need to be, but has an odd obsession with rhyming things anyways* overall it is a good poem. *can't believe no one has commented yet...should stab them*
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Re: If i told you.. (would you listen?)
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by Tru2Myself on
Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 01:16:46 PM AEST
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| Wow, I really love this. I dont know how to explain why but it really gets to me. I'm dying for you baby....wow i really like this. Lauren |
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Re: If i told you.. (would you listen?)
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th January 2005 @ 06:42:39 AM AEST
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| I like it, though it is sad adn kind of tragic, but then, such is life. |
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Re: If i told you.. (would you listen?)
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by afterdark on
Friday, 7th January 2005 @ 08:43:33 PM AEST
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| Very good write. |
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Re: If i told you.. (would you listen?)
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 05:45:04 AM AEST
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A very sad tragic poem, one can only feel the pain of this write.
Good write.
Hugs,
Jane x |
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Re: If i told you.. (would you listen?)
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by Unheard_Mute on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 01:05:26 AM AEST
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| woah woah woah, caiti, no cutting, please caiti, don't... |
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Re: If i told you.. (would you listen?)
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by MorbidDeath on
Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 11:47:42 PM AEST
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| this poem really touched me i remeber feeling taht way and it totally brought me back there again great write |
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Re: If i told you.. (would you listen?)
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by Deleterious_Dislike on
Monday, 14th March 2005 @ 04:23:29 AM AEST
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Woooh.. that was ace. I mean, I fear its true...
which isnt ace, cos anything to do with selfharm is bad, but totally up toy ou so you know...
i have my loves name on my thigh =)
But this is quite scary but the contrast of the love being involved makes it sooo captivating.
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