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On the edge
Contributed by
BlindSuicide
on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 09:50:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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As i slice my wrist and watch the blood flow
I just have one question and the answer i need to know
As i lay on the floor bleeding profusely
Will you cry for me?
If i take every last pill i see
Will you be my hero and rescue me?
Or what if i found your gun and pulled the trigger?
I wonder if that would erase your problems or make them bigger
what if for once i was happy without you
Without your little babygirl what would you do?
What if i ran away this time and never came back?
I know mom would be devistated
I don't know if you would love it or hate it
You mean the world to me and more
You say i mean the same to you
But everytime something goes wrong your the first to walk out the door
Or even worse you want me to leave
I have no where to go but sure if it makes you happy i'll leave
I'd lay on the ice cold sidewalk just to make you happy
I'd kill myself to be free of this pain
I have everything to lose and nothing to gain
So i'll ask you these questions once again
If i died tomorrow and you never seen my face
Just up and vanished without a trace
Would you cry for me?
Would you miss me?
Would you regret the things you did?
Would you even notice?
I sure hope so because i'm on the verge of doing all this
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2004-12-30 21:50:37]
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Re: On the edge
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by BlindSuicide on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 09:56:30 PM AEST
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| This was a bad write... i got so many things going through my head.. i didn't even notice..... *Sighs* Oh well |
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Re: On the edge
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 09:58:44 PM AEST
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| excellent write. if it stuck more to a rhyme scheme (which wouldnt be much work for most of this poem) than it would be a really good formatted poem. also i think some of this needs to be set in stanzas because of the change in tone. but its fine the way it is now. powerful poem, and i loved the ending. |
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Re: On the edge
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by emystar on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 10:07:18 PM AEST
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No u don't wonna put any one thru that. Sure you'd probably be o.k. but u gotta reach way down inside yourself and find the strength to endure.
I know iot gets hard but u need to learn to luv yourself.
If u r younger than 18 get some help with 911 and they will find u a place to stay.
This is really sad but don't do it cause u have a destiny to write and trust me you'll never be happy untill realize this and then your inner joy will come.
I was feeling kindda down before I came to your write but your write got my attention. Didn't take me long to get over my little pidddly depression.
P.m. me any time.
Awesome writing and u r on my prayer list.
Luv, hugg, faith, hope, joy, peace,
emy |
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Re: On the edge
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by kidpoet_213 on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 10:11:48 PM AEST
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You're not alone... you're definitely not alone... I know so many others who are in this same plight... Even I have been there...
No... this isn't a bad write... you got out some thoughts that had been in your head... that's good... they're not eating away at you anymore...
This has lots of emotion and lots of pain... My hope is that the person this is for will wake and see what they're doing to you...
If you ever need a friend... PM me...
~Donna~ |
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