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Sly
Contributed by
Bohemian_with_a_pen
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Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 08:44:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
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He rose from the sea smelling of salt and child hood memories. After 13 years I still recognised that face, those eyes, so strong, so bloody p***-weak. All the pain, all the anger I had felt for him over his 'suicide' as a teenager surged through my fists. He did not defend against me and it was only the shock of his blood that made me stop.
He was alive.
Questions ran riot through the streets of my mind, every thought rampaged and collided with the next. I managed to stutter out..
"W-why?"
I knew the answer before he told me.
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Re: Sly
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by subchild on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 08:59:25 PM AEST
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| Very diffrent..But I loved how it just flowed out. |
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Re: Sly
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 09:26:15 PM AEST
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| maybe you can write a poem that tells the story behind it =] great write. very captivating. the ending was a good twist, but i think the ending could be a bit better. |
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Re: Sly
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by Unheard_Mute on
Saturday, 1st January 2005 @ 02:47:53 AM AEST
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| wow... I must hear about this caiti |
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Re: Sly
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by afterdark on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 08:41:47 PM AEST
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| I tend to agree with Jennifer here to..I did like the poem,,it needed more back plot to it.. |
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Re: Sly
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by Deleterious_Dislike on
Monday, 14th March 2005 @ 04:29:06 AM AEST
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This is a really good piece, if youre looking from my perspective.
It begun and ended spot on like.
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