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Pointless war
Contributed by
Jakenstein
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Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 09:49:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
war
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Look at the hate we're breeding
Look at the fear we're feeding
Look at the lives we're leading
The way we've always done before
Look at your young men fighting
Look at your women crying
Look at your young men dying
The way we've always done before
We don't need your pointless war
It feeds the rich while it buries the poor
We don't need your pointless war
We're not gunna take it anymore
Look at the shoes we're filling
Look at the blood we're spilling
Look at the world we're killing
The way we've always done before
Look at the darkness hollow
Look at the leaders we follow
Look at the shame we swallow
And I don't want to take it anymore
We walk the walk with brainwashed pride
We set all of our feelings aside
Continuing on after our friends have died
This pointless war we can not hide
Look at what we're doing
Look at the country we're "renewing"
Look at the people booing
All this for a pointless war
Look at the oil we're stealing
Look at what they're feeling
Look how no one's healing
Anyone in this pointless war
We only think of our greed
We don't think of their need
We've come to plant our seed
For our wallets we must feed
Copyright ©
Jakenstein
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2004-12-29 21:49:20]
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Re: Pointless war
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 09:51:59 PM AEST
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| needs to repeat look less. powerful poem. well written. a war might be pointless, but it still has strong consequences. |
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Re: Pointless war
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by The_Callif on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 09:57:25 PM AEST
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| i agree completely, great poem |
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Re: Pointless war
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by Rhymingron on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 10:05:48 PM AEST
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| I like this. We need to hear more. |
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Re: Pointless war
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by cheech on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 10:07:45 PM AEST
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i strongly agree war is pointless and i'm sure this poem would make a great song,if u need any help maken it a song u should get savedbydeath to help u,shes amazing at writing lyrics,but if not i'm sure u'd do an awesome job,keep writen,i really loved this write
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Re: Pointless war
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by Luka on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 10:54:03 PM AEST
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nice nice nice, loved it, i hhave read a few anit war pomes but this was tops them all....i love it
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Re: Pointless war
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 11:03:56 PM AEST
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| this was a well structured write and ur point came across well....war is pointless..it serves no purpose......great poem and relative to our times |
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Re: Pointless war
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by TheEarlyNovember on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 11:13:33 PM AEST
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"War is pointless" tell that to the soldiers risking their lives everyday for a pointless war its only for you. Don't forget that these soldiers joined the military out of their own free will. That government money isn't just for your college fund. I see alot of talk on here. Wheres the action. "We want action".
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Re: Pointless war
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by Rxqueen on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 12:59:40 AM AEST
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Guns and Roses CIvil War: "Look at your young men fighting
Look at your women crying
Look at your young men dying
The way they've always done before
Look at the hate we're breeding
Look at the fear we're feeding
Look at the lives we're leading
The way we've always done before
Look at the shoes your filling
Look at the blood we're spilling
Look at the world we're killing
The way we've always done before
Look in the doubt we've wallowed
Look at the leaders we've followed
Look at the lies we've swallowed
And I don't want to hear no more "
Yours: "Look at the hate we're breeding
Look at the fear we're feeding
Look at the lives we're leading
The way we've always done before
Look at your young men fighting
Look at your women crying
Look at your young men dying
The way we've always done before
Look at the shoes we're filling
Look at the blood we're spilling
Look at the world we're killing
The way we've always done before
"
HEY, looks like it was already made into a song... I don't think it is a good idea to pass someone elses work off as your own!!!!
And all wars are not pointless. My husband did not join the military for no reason....
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Re: Pointless war
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 03:38:26 AM AEST
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Well now that i saw Rxqueens post i guess this is not your original work.
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Re: Pointless war
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by Jakenstein on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 09:59:28 AM AEST
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| I did not realize that I had done this till it was pointed out to me. I have heard the song a few times, so i guess thats where i got the inspiration to write this but i didn't know i took that much from it. If you read all my other poems you will know i always write similar to this...with repeated phrases or words...i promise i will be careful from now on and watch what i'm writeing....so i guess i should give credit to guns n roses for this poem then....i'm truly sorry..it will never happen again |
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Re: Pointless war
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by TheEarlyNovember on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 11:51:53 PM AEST
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| Must be a democrat |
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Re: Pointless war
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by ERiN_BuRgEr on
Thursday, 6th January 2005 @ 10:01:31 AM AEST
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I enjoyed it....... It was easy to read but had a really powerful message ...... Aty first i found the very systematic rhyme scheme a little off putting but as i read on i found that it fitted really well , added something to the poem with the reapetation of those lines '' the way weve always done before ''........ I think it would work brillliantly as a song .......
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Re: Pointless war
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by wakegurl77 on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 03:44:46 PM AEST
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i agree with you that this war did not need to be faught but i do not agree with you that it was for oil it wasnt if we were stealing oil from them wouldnt the prices of oil be going down insted of up??? please tell me becasue i dont understand
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