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What Could Be
Contributed by
essentially9
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Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 09:01:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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What Could Be
You want to give up
Give in to sin
You want to let go
Of all the pain within
And never ever know
What you could've been
If you could transcend
If you could've left a dent
You want to let go
Sick of holding on
Caught in the undertow
Till everything is gone
You want to let go
And never ever know
If life would've changed
With an end to pain
Or just stay the same
You're blinded by your misery
And only see half of everything
And that is all you believe
But I wish that you could see
That since life isn't worth living
How come so many are breathing?
Since life isn't worth trying
How come so many aren't dying?
They think their life is worth saving
And they keep on fighting
But you'll let go
To the undertow
You're dying to be free
Or because you're weak
You'll let go
Of what could be
Copyright ©
essentially9
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2004-12-29 21:01:57]
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Re: What Could Be
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by killingmehslowly on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 09:08:09 PM AEST
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| first off let me say...I love it. It is truly a great write and it makes sense. When i get into my 'moods' nobody can get through to me and everything seems bad. 'course I am a naturally pessimisstic person..heh heh. But we'll overlook that. lol. Again, great write. -Sami- |
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Re: What Could Be
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by The_Callif on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 09:10:21 PM AEST
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| sad but still a good poem |
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Re: What Could Be
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by CodyJ on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 09:25:32 PM AEST
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| kudos |
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Re: What Could Be
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by afterdark on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 10:16:52 PM AEST
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| You can write some of the best stuff here..Your style is always amazing to me. |
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Re: What Could Be
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 01:26:26 AM AEST
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wow this hit me really, really hard I could
totally relate to this. To be blunt this was great
thanks for sharing it.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: What Could Be
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by pyro_88 on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 01:28:25 AM AEST
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great poem. keep em coming
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Re: What Could Be
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by Rhymingron on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 05:53:57 AM AEST
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| Very good poem, very thoughtful and sad. |
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Re: What Could Be
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by TaintedSoul on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 06:27:06 AM AEST
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The emotion here is very strong as the words reach out to touch the souls of others. Great write.
peace
TS |
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Re: What Could Be
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by Kitty_cat on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 07:17:53 AM AEST
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Woah, great poem. Full of emotion.
cat xx |
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Re: What Could Be
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by pixie on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 10:46:51 AM AEST
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that was very powerful and emotional,
pixie xx |
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Re: What Could Be
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by Unheard_Mute on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 09:16:54 PM AEST
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O.O
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I'm just paranoid, this one too looked directed to me at first...
Great poem jen, keep 'em comming |
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