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Left, Right, Left
Contributed by
blossomingcherry5353
on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 09:03:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
war
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The only sound made was a
Left, Right, Left
As they proudly treaded foward
Long harsh nights waiting beside the fire
For news that this war was over
Days upon days waiting silently
As the plans for a battle erupt,
Painful expressions are all that you find
They know what is expected
Yet their head is still held high
With pride for one another
They march forward with a sound of
Left, Right, Left
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blossomingcherry5353
... [
2004-12-28 21:03:01]
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Re: Left, Right, Left
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 09:36:50 PM AEST
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Hey for your first attempt, it's not bad at all.
Nice job. |
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Re: Left, Right, Left
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 09:41:33 PM AEST
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| it was an okay poem. this doesnt seem to be powerful or emotional like a war tends to be. and the left, right, left part was unusual because its commonly known as left, right, left, right. |
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