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Walking With The Dark
Contributed by
unforgiven
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Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 05:45:06 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I had to leave this house,
Tension growing insane,
Left to escape outside,
Out swallowed by the dark.
No fear left in my heart,
My mind clear of thoughts,
I walked the asphalt road,
Away from everything and everyone.
People passing in their cars,
Faces hidden by shadows,
Watching with suspicious eyes,
The girl walking with the dark.
Taking the stairs to the beach,
Silence surrounding me with ease,
Walked to a sodden picnic table,
Lay on it's surface to breathe.
And when the waves crashed down,
Roaring against the pull of the ocean,
I thought of you and I,
Tried to cry but no tears came.
My heart became oh so heavy,
As I stumbled home to you,
Knew that it was my last chance,
I was alone,
I was at peace,
Walking with the dark.
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unforgiven
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Re: Walking With The Dark
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 06:21:01 AM AEST
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Awesome writing.
U r a great writer. No need for worry.
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emy |
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Re: Walking With The Dark
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by poetrygirl1991 on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 09:02:06 AM AEST
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| no need to worry your poem was amazing!! Please read my poem "everytime" and tell me what you think i shouls do!!~~chrissy |
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Re: Walking With The Dark
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by brew on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 09:02:30 AM AEST
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Not a bad write..........deep, with emotion. Thanks for sharing.
Brew~
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Re: Walking With The Dark
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by TaintedSoul on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 09:44:30 AM AEST
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A fairly good write ... sometimes the muse leaves us stranded at the verbage bus station from time to time. The emotions flow well here and the ending is wonderful.
peace
TS |
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Re: Walking With The Dark
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 11:12:07 AM AEST
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this is wonderful full of emotions and images can feel you walking in the dark
Michelle |
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Re: Walking With The Dark
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 04:59:06 PM AEST
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| I think this is very good. A lot of emotion was put into it. Great job! |
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Re: Walking With The Dark
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by tWiStLe on
Friday, 7th January 2005 @ 09:10:07 PM AEST
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| I luv dat u let me read ur work beck cuz i can see in2 wat ur realli feelin.... i find that u (and me also....) dont express the way we feel in speech.... im worried bout u cuz the feelings dat i read thru ur poems impact strongly... on me... n obviosuli others n dats prolly y they juz cum 2 us out of no where.... cuz we need to express our situations sumhow.... keep writing beck its beautiful |
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Re: Walking With The Dark
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by Delusions on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 03:52:04 AM AEST
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| awsome babes... u are truly a star when it comes to ur poems. They constantly leave me begging for me!!! Love u hunni xox |
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