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Clear Mind
Contributed by
crash
on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 04:50:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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The pain is no rush to me
for I am familiar with misery
It's over now
I have hurt so many
When I'm gone
no hurt will be felt by any
They don't deserve what I've done
Now please, Give me back my gun
Now please
let me explain
to no one more
shall I cause any pain
Give it back
to me now please
so that their pain
may start to ease
Don't make me take it,
I will use force
Now let me kill
this dying horse
For I am a beast
and nothing more
For this life I have
I have no need for
This life
the one that I live
I take too much
and I never give
This has brought me
to my end
Let everyone's pains
start to mend
In my end,
there is beggining
Everyone involved
will be winning
I get to leave
my troubles behind
Now give it back
So I may clear my mind
Copyright ©
crash
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2004-12-28 04:50:08]
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Re: Clear Mind
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by Sapphire_Blue on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 04:58:17 AM AEST
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| So much loss and sadness, yet written very emotionally, dont give up the fight for life, find something to hold on to, cool poem, painting a very vivid picture. |
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Re: Clear Mind
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by EternalNight4x on
Thursday, 6th January 2005 @ 02:57:19 PM AEST
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| excellent write. very emotional and well expressed. I can relate to this very well, keep it up |
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Re: Clear Mind
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by Chaos_is_apon_us on
Friday, 21st January 2005 @ 11:17:53 PM AEST
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This poem is very well written, though I can see better ways of self redempton than suicide. I like the emotion, the vivid picture painted in my mind, and the way you look out for others while trying to get out of yourself
Better dayz
~Jace~ |
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