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In the Trench
Contributed by
hoidy
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Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 11:19:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
war
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Encompassed by dark
Hounded by thoughts
Terrified by sounds
Hoping for hope
Wishing for home
Never Sleeping
Always fearing
Alone but surrounded
The howling of death
The ferociousness of man
Feeling the bitter cold
Life in slow motion
Missiles streaming past
Holding the cold steel
Just a normal night
With my head in the sand
Copyright ©
hoidy
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2004-12-27 23:19:37]
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Re: In the Trench
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 11:21:35 PM AEST
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Wow...you really expressed the feelings a soldier often experiences during war.
Good write. |
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Re: In the Trench
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by O7NeVeS on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 11:24:38 PM AEST
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| That's pretty deep...reminds me of my first love who is Iraq right now... |
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Re: In the Trench
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by faith_my_eyes on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 11:35:31 PM AEST
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| this poem is very vivid... I am sure a soldier could verify the scenes described. good job |
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Re: In the Trench
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by emystar on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 11:40:38 PM AEST
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This is an awesome write!
We need more of this type writing as it's much a reality.
I've never been a soilder but once married one and my son was in the Army.
I've oftened wondered how it fellt to be in a fox hole without doing it ofcourse.
Keep writing 'cause we all need to know these feelings. I already know about the sacrifice u make with your luved ones jus to keep us out of harms way.
God bless u 4 this write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: In the Trench
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 01:33:22 AM AEST
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intense and deeply emotional I admire your courage blessings to you
Michelle |
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Re: In the Trench
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 02:39:52 AM AEST
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I know some soldiers thats going to war on January and let me tell im scared for them. They can so relate to this and im sure they'll love it like i did.
Hugs,
Jane x |
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Re: In the Trench
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by Sapphire_Blue on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 05:03:02 AM AEST
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| Beautiful poem, visual and tender, creating some awesome images, full of strength and depth, cool poem. |
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Re: In the Trench
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by Rxqueen on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 06:35:00 PM AEST
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| Very powerful. Good write! I hope our soldiers come home soon and get our of the sand... But it will be years before that happens. This was a great peice, I really liked it. |
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