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My battle
Contributed by
karmen
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Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 10:28:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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As I get my razor out,
I close my eyes tight,
because I don't want to see,
the sight,
of whats about to happen.
I start to cry,
as i begin to cut,
God! All I want now is to die,
It hurts so bad,
But I don't want to admit,
now that I've started,
it's like a fire has been lit.
I feel as though,
this is my need,
it calls for me,
almost like it must feed,
on my blood,
which starts to run,
this is not a game,
this is not fun.
Close my eyes count to ten,
The room starts to spin,
I try so hard to stop,
but this is just a fight I can't win.
Throbbing pain is now here,
I put the razor away,
and i know,
it defintely isn't there to stay.
Copyright ©
karmen
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2004-12-27 10:28:44]
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Re: My battle
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by pixie on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 12:08:57 PM AEST
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sad and emotoinally written
pixie xx |
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Re: My battle
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by smooshable on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 02:59:12 PM AEST
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| As soon as you say you're getting the razor out we all know what's happening.... I felt a little tingle down my spine as I read through your poem. I could see you sitting there, slowly pushing it in and out, cutting along. Your experimentation with death was sureal. I actually felt scared and then relieved when you stopped short. But like you said, the pain isn't there to stay, what ever pain is in your, and everybody who reads this poems lives, it won't last forever. The pinprick of light you leave at the end of your poem is just magical and perfect. |
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Re: My battle
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by autumngreeneyes on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 05:52:35 PM AEST
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| Well..the poetry is good I hope you aren't a cutter..so many people on the site are. It seems like a fad; like hair color or .. hip-huggers, only it leaves scars.. |
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