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Tears Of Love
Contributed by
Zack_Chamber
on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 05:20:48 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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can i close my eyes,
it was soo good dream,
i need it back,
i wants it back,
can i ??
can i call at ur house,
can i listen ur sweet voice,
can i hear my name from ur sweet tongue,
can i ??
Can i wait for u,
Can i love u,
Can i b with u,
Can i take ur name,
Can i ??plzz
Can i ask some thing ?
Can i ?
can u bring me those 5 months,
Can u ?
Can u bring my happiness back
Can u ?
Can u forget every thing that happend
Can u ?
Can i ask u too love meee coz i loove u (Parents) So Much,
Can i plzzzz... i beg yaaa.... plzzz
Copyright ©
Zack_Chamber
... [
2004-12-27 05:20:48]
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Re: Tears Of Love
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by Zack_Chamber on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 04:15:13 AM AEST
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| This Poetry will wet our eyes and heart to the Love Of Our parents as well as To the God .. |
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Re: Tears Of Love
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by Row on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 05:56:44 PM AEST
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| mmm good |
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Re: Tears Of Love
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by Loyalist on
Friday, 31st December 2004 @ 01:35:10 AM AEST
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| I really liked your ideas and the direction you were going with this. I do want to give some constructive criticism though, this would've done better with a little bit of a rewrite. It seems hasty. DOn't get me wrong, this is very good foundation. Your previous poem "Ray of Light" was a more well wrought poem. Still I liked this one. Keep'em coming! I really want to read more from you. God Bless and thank you for reading my opinion. |
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Re: Tears Of Love
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by backs_romeo on
Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 07:26:02 AM AEST
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hi zack
u wrote such a nice poetry but i know that u wrote this poetry on ur girl friend not ur parents
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Re: Tears Of Love
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 28th March 2006 @ 11:20:34 AM AEST
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| nice poem.. |
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