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Exits Revisited
Contributed by
saint858
on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 03:14:56 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I need rest.
I am tired.
The deep sea looks friendly.
Can she help me sleep?
I need rest.
I am tired.
The sharp knife looks able.
Can it help me sleep?
I need rest.
I am tired.
The poison pills look simple.
Can they help me sleep?
I need rest.
I am tired.
Sleep looks so pleasant.
But can it find me peace?
For I hold
Nothingness
Like a burden on my back.
I hope
To exchange
My hopelessness
For the comfort of
Goodbye.
Copyright ©
saint858
... [
2004-12-27 03:14:56]
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Re: Exits Revisited
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by Stonedraider23 on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 03:28:46 AM AEST
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| good write i didn't really understand it but pretty good keep it up |
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Re: Exits Revisited
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 03:40:47 AM AEST
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| wow this is really good, well done! |
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Re: Exits Revisited
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by emystar on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 04:31:11 AM AEST
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I have no problem understanding but I pray it's only awesome writing.
faith, hope, joy, peace,
emy
p.m. me anytime |
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Re: Exits Revisited
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by Evilcaf on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 05:44:37 AM AEST
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| I understand it only to well, please dont do anything rash. Its a very good writing and look forward to reading more! .. luv Caf xx |
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Re: Exits Revisited
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 11:51:32 AM AEST
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Wow, I thought this was excellent...really good job here
Mason |
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Re: Exits Revisited
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by flat_line on
Saturday, 1st January 2005 @ 11:19:30 PM AEST
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great write. i like the style of the poem and how you ended it with peace. hang in there
Lauren |
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Re: Exits Revisited
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by Sensommar on
Sunday, 27th March 2005 @ 06:15:53 AM AEST
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Leaving means leaving it like it is
in its emptiness
Staying is everthing
Stay and leave footprints ..
I like your poem a lot
With love Pia |
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