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Tea Leaves... (almost)
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 03:16:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
ambiguous
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She is reading tea leaves
Instead of baking bread
She says it's a necessity
(not really, but yes -she said)
She’s considering the probability
That she’ll see a shooting star
Instead of balancing her checkbook
(Oh! The lies that we all are!)
[Break… BREAK… me]
whisper…
It’s here in hushed voice
That I exist now (mostly)
So many, so so many
Cannot really hear me
[Build… BUILD… blocks]
Pop… bubble; panic… rhyme
Silly little girl of mine
Pack the box with lemon paste glue
One more, two less… just you.
Put back what’s been taken out
Wrap in twine, tie all those knots
Give up then and return
(To kitchen stove, to oven burns)
[Think… THINK... now]
dare…
But if I could fly
On delicate (see through) wings
Then clearly, clearly then
I’d say most anything
[Close… CLOSE... enough]
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Re: Tea Leaves... (almost)
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by autumngreeneyes on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 03:47:28 PM AEST
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I can't fly and I still say anything..but that's me..(smirk)
I can't write ambiguous poetry..but you do it beautifully. I never get it either.. you know that once I baked a pizza upside down..my grandaughter caught it..the cheeze was drizzling all over.. I don't to this day know how I did that. Anway this was beautiful... |
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Re: Tea Leaves... (almost)
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by LevyMetal on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 04:02:32 PM AEST
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| I personally loved it. Im gonna go ahead and buy one and recieve the free one as well, thanks. =o) Keep freebies coming. |
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Re: Tea Leaves... (almost)
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 04:17:15 PM AEST
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*hugs you tons*
I'm not quite sure what to make of this, but I suspect Jarred is right. He normally is.
What I do know is that you have some amazing talent, and I wish I could make words work like you can.
Amazing write hunni,
Merry christmas.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Tea Leaves... (almost)
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 07:12:23 PM AEST
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good write, Snemmy.
Your brackets make me wonder.
I don't see them so often used,
but they remind me of Nuyorican stuff.
--Ghosty |
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Re: Tea Leaves... (almost)
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 08:29:40 AM AEST
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Very diffrent for you in style. This gives me that torn, meloncholy feeling.
The only thing I MIGHT disagree with is the very last line. |
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Re: Tea Leaves... (almost)
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 08:22:55 PM AEST
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| very original, I like it! |
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Re: Tea Leaves... (almost)
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by SocialMisfit on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 02:43:52 AM AEST
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not sure if i fully understand the poem but it was a fun read anyway.
SM |
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Re: Tea Leaves... (almost)
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by Stitch on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 11:51:11 AM AEST
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Oh, they grow so fast and we can never hold those moments. They are but a glimmer---like fairy wings---burned out quickly by the candle of time moving forward. Clench the precious memories as tight as you can for you will never quite see inside and never be as close was you long to be.
Stitch |
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Re: Tea Leaves... (almost)
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 14th January 2005 @ 07:14:11 PM AEST
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Bravo! *claps*
I can't stay to comment more, since my library internet time is about up (2:02 mintues and counting down), but, excellent work.
Andrew |
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Re: Tea Leaves... (almost)
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 07:08:23 AM AEST
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| awesome |
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Re: Tea Leaves... (almost)
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by UnlovedChild on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 04:21:44 PM AEST
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| An amazing poem. |
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Re: Tea Leaves... (almost)
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 4th June 2006 @ 02:02:07 AM AEST
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| This poem induces so many thoughts. I love it! Really, brilliant and amazing. |
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