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in his dreams shes nothing
Contributed by
prozac_memory
on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 02:37:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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In his dreams she’s nothing
Dreams become reality
And she’ll stand there screaming words
And he’ll stand there with his eyes shut
Pretending not to notice
She’ll make up stories of unseen wisdom
Where he loves her and no one lives a lie
He’ll break these stories of cherished hope
Where she cracks and cries till dawn
She’ll write him letters of her undying love
And he’ll burn them before she’s put pen to paper.
She’ll wait for him forever hoping maybe
Just maybe he’ll come back to her
He’ll never wait again
He’ll never wait forever
He’ll never walk backwards into her arms
He’ll never …
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Re: in his dreams shes nothing
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by Auriga on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 02:43:33 PM AEST
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prozac memory,
Powerful poem.
William |
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Re: in his dreams shes nothing
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by LiquidChaos on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 05:03:31 PM AEST
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| I like this a lot...it seems to me like a song I would listen to...maybe you should try putting a tune to it...that's just me though...nice job! |
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Re: in his dreams shes nothing
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 06:47:34 PM AEST
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I'm not sure if I've read your work before... but... I'm seriously thinking I should be reading you! You've completely drawn me in with this piece.
I like that you've presented this from the other perspective, so to speak. The reality of it... is rather painful, but effective in the write. I also like how this progresses... it felt as it dragged me on/into it. Mostly though... it is the ending that got me. I love/hate it - maybe you know what I mean by that. *sigh*
Well done!
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Re: in his dreams shes nothing
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 06:50:33 PM AEST
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I'm back...
I toggle over to your page after dropping my comment - and discovered that this is your first post (no wonder I did not recognize your user name!).
So... I had to come back and say - Welcome to YPDC!!!!!!!!!!! Please stick around a while and keep posting... I look forward to reading more of your work!
~SNM~
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Re: in his dreams shes nothing
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by Mangs on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 07:00:13 PM AEST
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moving write....amazing.
Umang. |
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Re: in his dreams shes nothing
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by hellsfallenangel on
Sunday, 26th December 2004 @ 01:21:45 AM AEST
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welcome welcom to this very kool site hope
will injoy yourself here and keep writing good
stuff and dont forget to check out others
peoples stuff cause u might find that there are
friends to be made here bye for now
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Re: in his dreams shes nothing
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 03:47:20 PM AEST
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Nice write. It's sad though....
I look forward to reading more of your work. :-) |
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Re: in his dreams shes nothing
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 07:03:44 AM AEST
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Wow! This is incredibly impressive. Anxious to read more of your stuff.
Stitch |
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Re: in his dreams shes nothing
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by Scarlett on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 08:57:28 AM AEST
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this is amazing, especially for a first post.
powerful and absorbing! this was great to read, really fast moving. i liked it a lot, especially last four lines x |
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