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This Man's Monster
Contributed by
Luka
on
Friday, 24th December 2004 @ 12:29:33 AM in AEST
Topic:
mystical
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A man sits alone
behind walls of stone
Hiding the monster, that he had grown
watching its energy being released
the walls come down because of this beast
the man gives up
after just a hour
allows the monster
his life to devour
the satisfied beast
as if to implore
tilted its head
and let out a roar
the beast had won
the anger was done
down came the paws
in went the claws
the man sat up
and went for his knife
and courageously took his own life
so the beast couldn't come back
for another attack
Copyright ©
Luka
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2004-12-24 00:29:33]
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Re: This Man's Monster
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 24th December 2004 @ 03:09:08 AM AEST
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This definitely has a mysterious feel to it, I like it. It is creative and original.
I hate to be pedantic (and even hypercritical considering my last poem!) but you should check your spelling a bit more carefully before posting. |
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Re: This Man's Monster
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by Luinil on
Friday, 24th December 2004 @ 12:04:40 PM AEST
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| very unique and nice flow* |
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Re: This Man's Monster
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by biggredd on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 09:53:53 PM AEST
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Luka man~ you know you work is awesome, and you don't need anyone to tell you that... you have the gift to see what isn't spoken and you are able to put it into words. Hopefully one day your poetry takes you to great places. Keep up the good work. And thanx for being insperation, lol.
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Re: This Man's Monster
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by Jane_Doe on
Sunday, 26th December 2004 @ 05:06:22 PM AEST
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| Lovely choice of words. Great flow. I loved it. |
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Re: This Man's Monster
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 01:34:19 AM AEST
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| Great poem. The flow is awesome. :-) |
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Re: This Man's Monster
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by Luka on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 12:22:05 AM AEST
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| yea this is carl posting this not luka. man im your bestfriend since gradeschool and ive read all your but this is probably one of thes best ive seen since "The Funny Looking Kid" |
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