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Given up (not really im starten to fight back)
Contributed by
bluebird
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Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 04:08:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Animosty is costin me, settin my rage free,causin enemies to flee, inslaved by a morbid mentality, early on my innocence suffered a fatality, this mind filled with memories of abnormalities, these flows are my only way to release this part of me, cant classify me as a thug or a "G", cuz my demeanor switches and never agrees, Lord I need an intervention so Im on my knees, please understand my angry shouts translate to desperate pleas, need something true in my life, before this coldness makes me freeze/
So far off track that I feel disqualified, lifes race Im straying from but still so scared to die, straddling the fence between good and bad, fillin my own head with lies, knowing in the end God wont hear my alibis/
My man and I got love but we are still lackin so much, past betrayals entering the mind each time that we touch, before I was quick to help, for him I wanted so much, but now Im on a path of destruction and his hearts in my clutch, he follows me into darkness and darkness eats us for lunch, hes confused cuz of my changes, I never needed a crutch/
But these days Im feeling emotionally crippled, running from my problems only caused them to triple, now Im bringing down my man and for that Im heartless and fickle, it was never my intent for my soul to become tattered and rippled/
What a mess Ive made, I dont know if I'll ever wake up, sick of asking for water but gettin arsonic in my cup, puttin up walls all around me causin solitude to errupt, knowing Im weak inside cuz hurt feelings caused me to give up/
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Re: Given up (not really im starten to fight back)
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by Loyalist on
Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 04:16:59 AM AEST
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| Excellent freestyle! I take it you like to write/listen to Hip Hop? I wrote a few myself, but they are too explicit to post here. Still I cannot freestyle so I must admit I am a little envious that you can and so well. Thanks for reading my opinion. |
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Re: Given up (not really im starten to fight back)
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 05:57:55 AM AEST
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| Impressive. I wish i had the talent to write flows like that. I'm jealous! |
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Re: Given up (not really im starten to fight back)
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 06:49:25 AM AEST
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very interesting free style, it could be cleaned up a bit, but non the less its a very good write.
Hugs,
Jane x |
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