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Soon...
Contributed by
Red_October
on
Tuesday, 21st December 2004 @ 12:24:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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At some point in time you'll become
only a blurry outline
Or a concept with a face
lingering in the back of my mind
Soon you're going to go away for good.
We've struggled for a long time
to keep it together even this much,
and I've suffocated lonely only
by the pressure of your touch.
But it's not enough for either of us.
Soon you're going to go away for good.
Your familiarity and comfort hugs
are already fading away
and I'm just barely clinging to
broken pieces of the bricks we made.
The months pass by and I cry.
Soon you're going to go away for good.
The hours and the days
are wisped away
by more important things
always undefined
and these feelings are just swimming
in that sore spot of mine
because soon you're going to go away for good.
Copyright ©
Red_October
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2004-12-21 12:24:56]
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Re: Soon...
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by autumngreeneyes on
Tuesday, 21st December 2004 @ 12:46:14 PM AEST
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I know that feeling..it's just a matter of time. this was really a great job.
and I'm just barely clinging to
broken pieces of the bricks we made.
that was a great image... |
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Re: Soon...
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by Scarlett on
Wednesday, 22nd December 2004 @ 04:42:41 AM AEST
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that was amazing, loved it, especially the last stanza.
awesome as always x |
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Re: Soon...
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by pleasure_is_pain103 on
Friday, 24th December 2004 @ 07:41:44 PM AEST
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| that was awesome, very awesome....good job... |
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Re: Soon...
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by Nardo on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 12:49:55 PM AEST
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Would I be jumping the gun by saying your poetry doen't feel so.....sad? I can sense a bit of light at the end of a dark hallway.
Chin up girl.
Leonardo |
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