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Dizzy
Contributed by
ecly
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Tuesday, 21st December 2004 @ 01:40:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Sometimes I refuse to breathe,
From the heart I can't believe,
In broken minds and livid souls.
The touch I know I can't retreive.
Counting stars and tasting loss,
For stopping time, my final cost.
But I believe I lost control.
And here I lay upon the cross.
A bitter smile with cracking lip,
An autumn's fall my coldest trip,
And spinning in this twylight haze,
With dizziness I lost my grip.
Sometimes I refuse to breathe
No matter what I can't believe,
That awake is something more than this.
And in the darkness is my dream.
Copyright ©
ecly
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2004-12-21 01:40:32]
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Re: Dizzy
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by Gothchyk on
Tuesday, 21st December 2004 @ 01:45:24 AM AEST
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Great write.
A bitter smile with craking lip....With Dizziness I lost my grip.
Need I say more? |
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Re: Dizzy
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by bluebird on
Tuesday, 21st December 2004 @ 01:57:08 AM AEST
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this is a piece i can relate it to so many things in life.
~keep the faith~
BB |
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Re: Dizzy
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 21st December 2004 @ 02:33:55 AM AEST
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I love the first stanza the best, it reflects what im feeling sometimes. This is such a good write 5/5.
Hugs,
Jane x |
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