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Inside Out
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 12:16:11 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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In the ever after always maybe sometimes of my mind
I break the glass, I cut the line and fall away from Time
Mountains seem somehow movable and temptations incomplete
When I slip away from winter day and wallow in white heat
Living then in opposition to the things that I’ve been taught
I will slice the shell wide open to find what I have sought
Until in my hand a beating heart, both delicate and strong
Suddenly seems like everything that I’ve wanted all along
Shouting then to no one, I will tell the world what I now know
That something may be nothing, but nothing still can grow
For it’s already everything anyway and that I can’t deny
But it was only in the letting go that I could reach the sky
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Silent-No-More
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Re: Inside Out
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by Doriens_Picture on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 12:20:58 AM AEST
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It is always a bit of both i think
great write |
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Re: Inside Out
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by tiffy on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 01:12:28 AM AEST
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| i think wisdom and confusion are one in the same. it was a great write. keep up the good work! |
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Re: Inside Out
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 01:16:41 AM AEST
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| wow, this is awesome, well done!!!!! |
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Re: Inside Out
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by PhantomVampyress on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 01:49:48 AM AEST
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wow silent no more this is amazing.. I love that part "that something may be nothing, but nothing can still grow for its already everythng anyway" awesome lines and love this poem great job
peace and hope
JENNI |
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Re: Inside Out
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 04:46:07 AM AEST
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Well hunni, to be honest, to me it seemed like a bit of both, too.
I'm not exactly sure what to say about this.
I know that when I got to the end, I somehow thought it wasn't really finished, but I dunno why. Almost as if you had more to tell...
Good write hun. I especially like the second stanza, to me it flows better and shouts louder than the rest of the poem.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Inside Out
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by LEMMEN on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 06:08:46 AM AEST
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A little of both but none the less great write.
~DENNIS~ |
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Re: Inside Out
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 06:59:27 AM AEST
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well...lol..it figures that I am the only one this makes perfect sense to.
I see it as chasing what you long for with reckless abandon...knowing it isnt wise but doing it anyway to find happiness and contentment....a breaking of all rules in the search for the " thing" your heart desires.
I've been there.........
Very well done my friend
Roses
Larry |
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Re: Inside Out
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by Willofree on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 09:15:40 AM AEST
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A difficult issue, well done......
A profound write
Willofree |
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Re: Inside Out
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by pixie on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 09:31:19 AM AEST
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yep the two are very close together, brilliantly written,
pixie xx |
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Re: Inside Out
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by autumngreeneyes on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 10:22:49 AM AEST
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| I stopped by only because I saw your name and I always love your words whether or not I understand..LOL. Today I do. Letting go isn't always an easy thing to do..but always necessary if we are to grow as poets or as human beings. I have finally made peace with someone who is dear to me..and only in doing that am I able to let go..does that make sense? My heart was so troubled..I couldn't let go until I did that..anyway it's done and I feel at peace..brilliant write by the way and I was so happy to see your name :-) |
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Re: Inside Out
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 05:49:25 PM AEST
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As usual I see multiple meanings behind and within your words. I have a feeling that there is not one of your poems that says just one thing.
I see at least three in this one. I'll cling to the one I like best, but won't assume it is right. I would not be surprised if all three were true. You truely are an expert at weaving words. |
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Re: Inside Out
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by Nazmythian on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 06:27:31 PM AEST
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I thought about this for awhile ...read twice and left, came back and still felt as if it meant the same ...
We chase rainbows, searching for our pots of gold. Regardless of all of those things we've been told. Then one day we stop running, look about the place we stand ... and find the treasure we were seeking ... all along, held in our hand.
Sometimes when you stop trying to make something happen ... it just will ... of it's own accord, and the results may not be what we thought we wanted ... they are often better.
That's just my impression ... ( but what do I know ? )
Great write SNM
Nazzy ~
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Re: Inside Out
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 06:31:03 PM AEST
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"Living then in opposition to the things that I’ve been taught." Yeah, sometimes they don't teach us enough and sometimes they teach us the wrong stuff. I like the last line as well.
Great piece! Cheers! |
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Re: Inside Out
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by CrimsonTears on
Sunday, 19th December 2004 @ 10:25:43 PM AEST
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this is brilliant...i absolutely loved it.....so powerful and beautiful.....fantastic job
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
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Re: Inside Out
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by TaintedSoul on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 06:27:43 AM AEST
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We all must hold onto hope, even if it seems to leave us. And if we shout long enough, eventually someone might hear us. Profound.
peace
TS |
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Re: Inside Out
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by nickthesexbot on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 11:45:10 AM AEST
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| i really enjoyed this |
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Re: Inside Out
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 04:04:01 PM AEST
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After rereading this and discussing it a bit with a close friend of mine, I now see this a bit diffrently. I almost wonder if self struggling is the wrong catagory. Too bad there is not one called self inspirational!
I can almost feel you growing and see the needle of you internal compass swinging back to north.
Good for you! and great write! |
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Re: Inside Out
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 22nd December 2004 @ 12:29:39 AM AEST
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| I think wisdom is confusion somtimes! Great poem. |
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Re: Inside Out
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Wednesday, 22nd December 2004 @ 05:33:43 PM AEST
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I really like the last stanza,
but the whole is very good.
I also liked the blonde
girl in the string thong
in the ad that appeared under
your poem.
--Ghosty |
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Re: Inside Out
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by UnlovedChild on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 04:33:27 PM AEST
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| You're right, the two are alike, but you separate them well. Amazing write. |
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Re: Inside Out
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by GurlyTye on
Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 06:01:47 PM AEST
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| I've always been the type of person to have to read something 2 or 3 times befoer i grasp a clear interpretation. But from what i got.. i liked . |
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Re: Inside Out
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st June 2006 @ 07:22:37 AM AEST
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In an effort to avoid being Mr. Repeato Man.....
Wow!
Which spelled backwards is:
Wow!!!!
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