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Contributed by
atreyuskye
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Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 10:50:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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no phone
no call
i don't hear it
no voice
no communication
i don't hear your voice
on the other side of the phone
it's always someone else
i don't see your face in the clouds anymore
i see someone elses face in my darkness
her mouth open wide
she breathes life into me
i am dead inside
no breath escapes my soul
it has its own grave inside me
my soul is dead
it has been put to bed
no phone
no call
i don't hear it
no voice
no communication
photos empty
memories gone
a forgotten love
i was just a pawn
in your web of want and lust
but i left you in the dust
i let you go first
now you're left with a curse
what could've been
what was
Copyright ©
atreyuskye
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2004-12-17 22:50:05]
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Re: new
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by Doriens_Picture on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 12:16:01 AM AEST
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photos empty
memories gone
a forgotten love
i was just a pawn
in your web of want and lust
but i left you in the dust
i let you go first
now you're left with a curse
what could've been
what was
i like this poem very much but love how you ended it
your soul cant be dead to have written something this good |
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Re: new
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by atreyuskye on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 12:21:57 AM AEST
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| thank you |
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Re: new
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by PhantomVampyress on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 01:55:25 AM AEST
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beautiful and such a sad write.. but i know this feeling well ... I hope you can over come this .. awesome job in expressing this feeling though
Peace and hope
JENNI |
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Re: new
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 06:05:19 AM AEST
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Very artistically writen, i like the message you painted with this, cool write.
Hugs,
Jane x |
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Re: new
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by autumngreeneyes on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 10:26:47 AM AEST
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her mouth open wide
she breathes life into me
i am dead inside
no breath escapes my soul
it has its own grave inside me
my soul is dead
it has been put to bed
Maybe I'm not taking enough time..but if someone else is breathing life into you why are you still dead? That part doesn't make sense to me..
I liked it anyway.. |
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Re: new
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by atreyuskye on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 11:01:48 AM AEST
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| the part about her breathing life into is about someone else breathing life into me. she isn't the one i want but she wants to be with me, so my soul is still dead. |
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