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Ashes of Your Past
Contributed by
essentially9
on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 07:55:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Ashes of Your Past
The future is dying
Never to rise from the ashes
The present's left behind
As thoughts clutter your mind
The past stopped living
When you let go of misery
You're living for nothing
But yourself
You'll never have anything
But the pain felt
Your life's been ending
Since you were born
The future is pending
With society torn
The reasons that are within you
To live just get fewer
Till you have no reason to make it through
What never rose from the ashes
Was everything that was worth living for
Copyright ©
essentially9
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2004-12-17 19:55:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Ashes of Your Past
(User Rating: 1 ) by Doriens_Picture on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 07:59:39 PM AEST (User
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i had to go oooohhh after each line and it was worth the wait
great write |
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Re: Ashes of Your Past
(User Rating: 1 ) by TaintedSoul on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 08:01:11 PM AEST (User
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There is much truth within your words, mixed with the deceptive workings of one's mind. Enjoyed the read!
peace
TS |
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Re: Ashes of Your Past
(User Rating: 1 ) by aringb on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 11:09:42 PM AEST (User
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Really good poem. A lot of deep thought. Alice |
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Re: Ashes of Your Past
(User Rating: 1 ) by worldsenigma on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 11:42:31 AM AEST (User
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thats a really cool poem...i like the way u put it together. it's great and everything its just a little pessimistic...still really cool though. |
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Re: Ashes of Your Past
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 21st December 2004 @ 03:43:42 PM AEST (User
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Profound, almost like a warning, but perhaps too late?
Nicely done! |
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Re: Ashes of Your Past
(User Rating: 1 ) by Willofree on
Wednesday, 22nd December 2004 @ 09:59:14 PM AEST (User
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A sad and thought provoking write. I guess this poem reflects on the sad state our world is in.....it also entices me to counter with positive thoughts. I'm rambling, but this is a really excellant poem!
Thanks for sharing
Willofree |
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Re: Ashes of Your Past
(User Rating: 1 ) by the_Ghost_Moth on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 06:14:16 PM AEST (User
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keep writing,
you got the goods.
--Ghosty |
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Re: Ashes of Your Past
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 08:04:16 PM AEST (User
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Great write. The last two lines were especially powerful. |
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Re: Ashes of Your Past
(User Rating: 1 ) by Ravensfire on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 04:33:02 PM AEST (User
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outstanding! more, more. |
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Re: Ashes of Your Past
(User Rating: 1 ) by afterdark on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 05:46:03 PM AEST (User
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I loved this one..You kick so much ass in here..
AfterDark.. |
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Re: Ashes of Your Past
(User Rating: 1 ) by venkat on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 04:21:25 AM AEST (User
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vEry profound write...nice work.Venkat |
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