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Frozen SKy (re-make)
Contributed by
Luka
on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 05:13:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I walk aimlessly
under that frozen sky
It's like a crystal blanket
leaveing my world dry
The words will always stalk me
in the middle of the night
their like moveing pictures
in my head
always playing
untill i'm dead
under that frost bitten sky
Iced wind passes me
freezing me slowely
Andy my eyes so i can't see
but that frozen sky
Is the dome
that I call home
freezing the streets
in wich I roam
Copyright ©
Luka
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2004-12-17 17:13:44]
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Re: Frozen SKy (re-make)
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 05:56:33 PM AEST
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| emotional...nice write |
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Re: Frozen SKy (re-make)
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 06:50:18 PM AEST
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excellent write. well written besides some errors. nice emotion shown, and nice imagery.
i have about 200 poems that im ashamed of, and ill probably never revise them. =] |
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Re: Frozen SKy (re-make)
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by Doriens_Picture on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 11:44:46 PM AEST
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| hey great job and you know we all have typos |
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Re: Frozen SKy (re-make)
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by neglected1 on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 07:09:33 PM AEST
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i think its hard to go back and re-write something you already posted.. and get some what recognition from it... i aaplaud you though... this was a wonderful write.. i was amazed from begining to end.. you are truly talented..
keep up the wonderful work :)
~neglected1~ |
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Re: Frozen SKy (re-make)
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by Xeald on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 04:55:37 PM AEST
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Luke skywalker lookin ass mofo, i didnt read the poems just came on hear to call you out, battle rap at eds bring your best shiznit fool
_M 2 the T2 fonminal |
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