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Dying in My Dreams
Contributed by
MoonlitAngel
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Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 10:21:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
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When I'm dying in my dreams
I'm everything I'll ever be
My words are my life's sad song
And they will be here when I'm gone
...and I feel it slipping away...
Once upon a time, I had a dream
Where nothing at all was as it seemed
And I wondered how it could be wrong
When it always made me feel so strong
He was a voice of reason, a friend
One on whom I felt I could depend
His words, his thoughts, they kept me going
And I was falling without even knowing
Feeling so alone, empty and weak
Dissociated, I could not speak
The sky kept falling inside my head
Happiness hanging from a distant thread
Tangled up in his beautiful words
Reflecting the light, vision all blurred
Venomous eyes reduced me to tears
Everything I thought I knew just disappeared
Taken over, I could not forget
Actions I just refused to regret
Pushed and pulled, alone again and bent
But all along there was discontent
He came to me, falling so slowly
Till the day I found myself lonely
Waiting for something that would not come
Lost in love, I never thought I'd feel this numb...
and I let it all fall away...
Now I'm tearing at the seams
Screaming inside to be set free
But although I don't feel strong
I'll be holding you when you're gone...
Copyright ©
MoonlitAngel
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2004-12-17 10:21:08]
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Re: Dying in My Dreams
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by pixie on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 10:57:06 AM AEST
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such a sad and well expressed emotional write, great wrote Dee
pixie xx |
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Re: Dying in My Dreams
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 11:03:47 AM AEST
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| amazing and brilliant write dee. well written and well expressed. i love your style. i hope to read your other parts to this =] |
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Re: Dying in My Dreams
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by katyqueen35 on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 12:30:39 PM AEST
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I agree with pix very sad write.
An excellent emotional poem.
great job. |
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Re: Dying in My Dreams
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by Red_October on
Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 01:49:40 PM AEST
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"His words, his thoughts, they kept me going
And I was falling without even knowing"
I relate to these lines the best. I really enjoyed reading this. Tiffany J. (Red_October) |
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Re: Dying in My Dreams
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by Black13 on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 11:25:11 AM AEST
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Wow....
This will be long indeed.
I would love to know what set this idea off and I hope you continue it through to the end.
Not your norm but I still liked it very much. |
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Re: Dying in My Dreams
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by Rakerman1999 on
Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 07:40:23 PM AEST
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excellent...I'll be watching the rest ;o)
Roses
Larry |
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Re: Dying in My Dreams
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by Bridget_theMidget_Powerz on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 11:33:46 PM AEST
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| Wow, this is one of the best poems I've ever read, just as good as part two, which I read first heehee. |
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Re: Dying in My Dreams
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 01:52:39 AM AEST
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Dee, this is such a sad emotional write. It is writen and composed so well.
Hugs,
Jane x |
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Re: Dying in My Dreams
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 11:54:00 PM AEST
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A beautiful and touching piece. I like the elegance with which the emotion is portrayed. Well done, indeed.
Andrew |
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Re: Dying in My Dreams
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by Wachumiri on
Saturday, 1st December 2007 @ 06:33:56 AM AEST
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Wow...
I love that last line, it's so true. So often we cling to what we know, what we had, because there is at least a feeling of belonging, because we know that place.
Take care, that was a beautifully penned sigh.
David |
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