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Untiltled3
Contributed by
weepingprophet
on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 09:50:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
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and i told you once
that you were everything
that i'd die for you
i lied
i told you formality
you took it as sincerity
i said i couldn't live without you
but i'm still breathing
this heart is still beating
so i am the liar
you chose her
or did she choose you
i'll blame you both
but everyday
i'll pry my eyes open
and that same reflection
will stare right back
i'll stick my finger down my throat
i'll refuse the spoon and fork
and one day
i'll wake up from half a night's sleep
that's all i get these days
if any
and i'll look at that reflection
the girl you left
and i'll be different
smaller
and i'll say
no, you were the liar
i am just a dead girl
in the wake of a nightmare
and you are just an illusion
a promise of my imagination
i am this frail figure
pathetic enough
to stare until the sun goes down
and we are both liars
unaware
of what a promise is
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Re: Untiltled3
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by frozenintime on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 09:58:22 PM AEST
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| i like that a lot...a lot of feeling |
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Re: Untiltled3
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by Doriens_Picture on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 11:02:07 PM AEST
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| this does have alot of feeling but alot of it is hard to decifer that is good shows that it is personal and wll thank you for sharing |
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Re: Untiltled3
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by blueyes11 on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 05:46:09 PM AEST
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| i really like this. i didn't plan to comment or even read it, but i happened to come upon it and i have to say something. It really puts me, the reader, into a position of seeing things from your eyes. "one day i'll wake up from a half night's sleep.... and i'll look at that reflection.... and i'll be different." Very very good. |
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Re: Untiltled3
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by weepingprophet on
Wednesday, 22nd December 2004 @ 04:11:28 PM AEST
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| thank you all for your input i appreciate it :) |
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Re: Untiltled3
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 03:57:16 AM AEST
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| this is really good, well done |
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