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Release
Contributed by
Apolla
on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 08:37:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Losing conciousness with each breath,
Getting closer to the end.
I take a final gaze of my surroundings,
And endless thoughts run through my head.
The light seems a thousand times brighter than before,
The wallpaper dull and colorless.
I listen to the faint whisperings of the empty house,
This place I've called home for so long.
Suddenly a sharp pain of regret wreathes my body,
Knowing what awaits the arrival of my family....me.
Dull, lifless, and unmoving,
The blood stained knife laying by my side.
My vision begins to blur and I take one final look,
At my wrists stained with blood and I whisper........release.
Copyright ©
Apolla
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2004-12-15 20:37:41]
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Re: Release
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by Artemis03 on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 08:42:00 PM AEST
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| OMG... My mouth really, no lie, hit the floor... this is...is.. dang...::speechless:: |
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Re: Release
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by wray on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 08:46:21 PM AEST
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| Interesting one, most people write about the emotions that drive them to suicide rather than the actual waiting process itself. I found your regret contradictory with your final whisper of "release" though. But nice work =) |
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Re: Release
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by hoist1atca on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 09:05:22 PM AEST
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I agree with wray-
Why ask for release while having remorse...
It was a good write though...
Joe |
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Re: Release
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by wolfman on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 05:47:46 PM AEST
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some times those are the only thoughts that keep me from doing the same thing, I hope that goes for too. it would be painfulk to loss such a great writer hold on keep faith and dont let go of your life.
this was a very emotionaly moving poem it was hard hitting and very sad. writing very well please do post again.
be strong, dont give up. God bless |
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