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Fading Reflection
Contributed by
Artemis03
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Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 07:36:42 PM in AEST
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Looking into my reflection
I see a girl with so many questions.
Curiosity upon her face
On the other side, I stand in her place.
So much of her to explore,
and beyond this sad face is yet much more.
More than what you see everyday.
Pass the moon lite rays
in her eyes are the echos of loney cries.
I feel that she is slowly, internally, she dying.
She says to me, "My life is so confusing,
people find my pain amusing."
I whisper back, "I know what it's like
having to surivive day to day with a stuggle and fight."
Suddenly, holding up to her wrist
she whispers to me, "Make a wish."
Silent in shock, she falls to her death
Now seeing no reflection not even my breath
nothing but the message the she left.
"I wish to die...
So the world, instead of me, will cry."
Copyright ©
Artemis03
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Re: Fading Reflection
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by athena on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 07:49:18 PM AEST
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::gasp:: o my god...
its beautiful...really...
we share so many feelings
its strange...very very beautiful
write....
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Re: Fading Reflection
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by Mangs on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 08:06:51 PM AEST
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absolutely beautiful.....one of the best ive ever read......its so deep and sad..well written.
xxUmang.xx |
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Re: Fading Reflection
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by Apolla on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 08:27:35 PM AEST
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| Oh! This is your best yet and I love the last verse. Excellent. |
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Re: Fading Reflection
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by sicknivesevered on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 09:48:38 PM AEST
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| Aye, very nice. I especially like the 3rd stanza. Great job! (^_^)v |
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Re: Fading Reflection
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by hoist1atca on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 09:59:53 PM AEST
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Good poem-
Very well versed-
One must seek themself out by looking beyond mear mortal flesh and into the soul-
Joe |
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Re: Fading Reflection
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 10:28:13 PM AEST
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| well done. |
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Re: Fading Reflection
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by CrimsonTears on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 10:36:41 PM AEST
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i really enjoyed this....great write....excellent job...u ahve a talent
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
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Re: Fading Reflection
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by AKA_Anonymous on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 11:00:28 PM AEST
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| Wow, that poem is very deep... You are a very talented poet. |
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Re: Fading Reflection
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by SweetRhythm on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 04:06:23 AM AEST
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Now that was truly breathtaking! I'm speechless & utterly lost for words. Absolutely sensational. Am so glad one stuck around. What talent one has, hang on to it, it's your gift & how well you use it. That was a masterpiece. Very capturing & moving.
Excellent, just beautiful. Very enjoyable read.
Lovely.....lovely.....lovely.
5/5
Keep submitting please.
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Re: Fading Reflection
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 09:28:48 AM AEST
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| Truly well written. Good job. :) |
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